They Had Nothing to Say to Each Other
It has been a while since I've posted some of my creative writings. I just stumpled across this while reading through some old stuff and thought it was interesting. I'd love to hear your feedback.
"They had nothing to say to each other"
They had nothing to say to each other. They just stood there looking at one another, afraid if they moved, this magically moment would disappear. He stroked her hair, then moved his hand to her shoulder. They both knew that their relationship was over, but didn’t want it to end. The silence hung in the room. Cautiously, they finally made eye contact with each other. A tear slowly rolled down her face. With his thumb, he gently wiped the tear away.
Something deep inside was urging her to reach up and kiss him. She hesitated.
“Was he feeling the same?”
She looked into his eyes. And before she could think about it or talk herself out of it, she lifted herself up on to her tip toes and brushed her lips against his.
Surprisingly, he kissed her back.
Slowly she moved her arms around his neck and he grabbed a hold of her waist. She fell into his arms, kissing him deeply, enjoying these last few moments of “them”. Finally their lips parted. He forced himself to take a step back, toward the door. With one last squeeze of her hand, he opened the door and walked out of the house and out of her life.
6 comments:
Visiting from NaComLeavMo, that was very sweet. To bad not all endings are like that one!
Wow, very powerful and very visual!
Loved it, the words painted the setting perfectly. Great Job!
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that is sad. can you not make him stay. i demand a rewrite. his car wont start or there is a treacherous snowstorm and they are about to be snowed in - or hurricane depending on where they are. oh please...something.
now you may have 2 comments - oh crap 3 now (sorry) heeheehee
Thanks for sharing! Here from NCLM!
Oh, heartrending. Here from NaComLeavMo.
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